homework 05.17

2023-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the ways to show you care for the people around you other than helping them? I will say how I can help other ways without helping them directly. I think volunteer works and donation are good ways. I think these activities promote let others know and good influence is made. Because this way do not directly help them through volunteer works, and cooperate with others to make a good influence. I tend to think positively about volunteer work, but it it not easy to start it. In the past, I did volunteer work of blood donation. I hope my blood will help people who need it. But, these days I don\'t do that . I think I will do it again someday.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the ways to show you care for the people around you other than helping them?

I will say how I can help other ways without helping them directly.
>> I will say how I can help in other ways without helping them directly.
I think volunteer works and donation are good ways.
>> I think volunteer work and donation are good ways.
I think these activities promote let others know and good influence is made.
>> I think these activities promote and let others know that good influence is made.
Because this way do not directly help them through volunteer works, and cooperate with others to make a good influence.
>> Because of this way, I help them through volunteer works, and cooperate with others to make a good influence.
I tend to think positively about volunteer work, but it it not easy to start it.
>> CORRECT! 
In the past, I did volunteer work of blood donation.
>> CORRECT! 
I hope my blood will help people who need it.
>> CORRECT! 
But, these days I don\'t do that.
>> CORRECT! 
I think I will do it again someday.
>> CORRECT! 

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