homework 05.17

2024-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the main reasons of road accidents. I think the main reasons of road accidents is traffic signal violation. Many Koreans already know well, we can\'t wait a few seconds or minutes. So, sometimes when we crossing the traffic light, run a red light or speeds up the car quickly and down the road. Most problem is when a person and car accidents. If, a person and a car crush, pedestrians will be hurt more seriously. But, even if a pedestrian run a red light, the car driver will be punished. I don\'t understand about this situation, anyway we should to keep the signal and drive carefully.

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Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the main reasons of road accidents?


I think the main reason of road accidents is traffic signal violation.
>> CORRECT!
Many Koreans already know well, we can\'t wait a few seconds or minutes.
>> CORRECT!
So, sometimes when we crossing the traffic light, run a red light or speeds up the car quickly and down the road.
>> So, sometimes when we cross the traffic light, we run a red light or speed up the car quickly down the road.
Most problem is when a person and car accidents.
>> The topmost problem is when a person meets a car accident.
If a person and a car crush, pedestrians will be hurt more seriously.
>> If a person and a car crash, pedestrians will be hurt more seriously.
OR >> If a person and a car collide, pedestrians will be hurt more seriously.
But, even if a pedestrian run a red light, the car driver will be punished.
>> But, even if a pedestrian runs a red light, the driver will be punished.
I don\'t understand about this situation, anyway we should to keep the signal and drive carefully.
>> I don\'t understand this situation, anyway we should understand the signals and drive carefully.

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