homework 05.22

2023-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Why do you always get what you want? I have a personality that I must have what I want. Sometimes I buy trending items and things I need if I want. But, these days I think about things and buy things. If I buy things without thinking, it is a overspending after that my money run out. In the past I regretted it. Because I bought to much unnecessary things. But, sometimes I can\'t have everything I want. I give up easily if the item I want is ridiculously expensive. And, Honor is not get easy. Efforts is a unafforbable value.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you always get what you want?


I have a personality that I must have what I want.
>> CORRECT! 
Sometimes I buy trending items and things I need if I want.
>> CORRECT! 
But, these days I think about things and buy things.
>> But, these days I think about things and buy things that are necessary.
If I buy things without thinking, it is a overspending after that my money run out.
>> If I buy things without thinking, it is a form of overspending, and after that my money runs out.
In the past I regretted it. Because I bought to much unnecessary things.
>>  In the past I regretted it, because I bought to much unnecessary things.
But, sometimes I can\'t have everything I want.
>> CORRECT! 
I give up easily if the item I want is ridiculously expensive.
>> CORRECT! 
And, Honor is not get easy. 
>> And, Honor is not easy to get. 
Efforts is a unafforbable value.
>> Effort is an unaffordable value.

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