homework 05.30
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How important is tourism to your country?
In my opinion, it depends on the different rate generation, but many people like the tourism.
There are many reasons why people like to travel.
Among the reason, as we know, South Korea is a small country.
So many Korean people often go on a day trips if they have a enough time.
But on the downside, we think domestic travel don\'t have special point.
Honestly, I can\'t recommend tourist spot except for Seoul and Busan in South Korea.
This means everywhere we go, we can do the same activity programs , experience and food.
Similar reasons, there are many people feel sick of domestic travel.
This is because, many tour locations\'s staff provide the ridiculous prices and unkind attitudes to tourist.
I feel so ashamed, but sometimes I seen through the news a lot of cases of rip-off situation to foreign tourists.
That\'s why many Korean people go on an overseas trip instead of a domestic trip.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How important is tourism to your country?
In my opinion, it depends on the different rate generation, but many people like the tourism.
Please answer the question:
How important is tourism to your country?
In my opinion, it depends on the different rate generation, but many people like the tourism.
>> In my opinion, it depends on the different rates of each generation, but many people like tourism.
There are many reasons why people like to travel.
>> CORRECT!
Among the reasons, as we know, South Korea is a small country.>> CORRECT!
So many Korean people often go on a day trips if they have a enough time.>> So many Korean people often go on day trips if they have enough time.
But on the downside, we think domestic travel don\'t have special point.
>> But on the downside, we think domestic travels don\'t have a special point.
Honestly, I can\'t recommend tourist spot except for Seoul and Busan in South Korea.
>> Honestly, I can\'t recommend any tourist spots except for Seoul and Busan in South Korea.
This means everywhere we go, we can do the same activity programs , experience and food.
>> This means everywhere we go, we can do the same activities, experiences, and food.
Similar reasons, there are many people feel sick of domestic travel.
>> Similar reasons, there are many people who feel sick of domestic travels.
This is because, many tour locations\'s staff provide the ridiculous prices and unkind attitudes to tourist.
>> This is because many tour staff provide ridiculous prices and unkind behavior to tourists.
I feel so ashamed, but sometimes I seen through the news a lot of cases of rip-off situation to foreign tourists.
>> I feel so ashamed, but sometimes I see through the news a lot of rip-off cases to foreign tourists.
That\'s why many Korean people go on an overseas trip instead of a domestic trip.
>> CORRECT!
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