homework 06.01

2023-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Have you ever dreamt about something that later came true? I always think positively. I don\'t think anything can be achieved if I have negative thoughts. One of my favorite sentence is, \"Have a big dream, even if breaks, the piece will be big.\" Realistically, I think some of achieve even if I have difficult dreams or fail. I have not achieve my big dream yet. Besides, I am not yet set a my big dream. So, these days, I set for big dream, I meet new people, talk about various topics, travel, and stack experience. I believe these things will be achieve for my dreams later.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Have you ever dreamt about something that later came true?

I always think positively. 
>> CORRECT! 
I don\'t think anything can be achieved if I have negative thoughts.
>> CORRECT! 
One of my favorite sentence is, \"Have a big dream, even if breaks, the piece will be big.\"
>> One of my favorite sentence is, \"Have a big dream, even if it breaks, the piece will be big.\"
Realistically, I think some of achieve even if I have difficult dreams or fail.
>> Realistically, I think some of them could be achieved even if I have dreams that are difficult to achieve or failures.
I have not achieve my big dream yet. 
>> I have not achieved my biggest dream yet. 
Besides, I am not yet set a my big dream.
>> Besides, I haven\'t set my biggest dream yet.
So, these days, I set for big dream, I meet new people, talk about various topics, travel, and stack experience.
>> So, these days, I set for big dreams, meet new people, talk about various topics, travel, and stack experience.
I believe these things will be achieve for my dreams later.
>> I believe these things will be achieved later on.

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