homework 06.07

2023-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Do you love participating in university festivals? I don\'t really like to participate in university festivals It\'s because I don\'t like crowd places. Usually, when university festivals are hold, celebrities are invited for increase student\'s participation. If I see a celebrity I like people it\'s felling amazing and happy. However, there are so many people, I can\'t go home even if I want to after the concert. And except for celebrity concert, university festivals is not fun. So I don\'t like university festivals.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you love participating in university festivals?

I don\'t really like to participate in university festivals.

>> CORRECT!

It\'s because I don\'t like crowd places.

>> It\'s because I don\'t like crowded places.

Usually, when university festivals are hold, celebrities are invited for increase student\'s participation.

>> Usually, when university festivals are held, celebrities are invited to increase student\'s participation.
If I see a celebrity I like people it\'s felling amazing and happy.

>> If I see a celebrity I like seeing people feel amazed and happy.

However, there are so many people, I can\'t go home even if I want to after the concert.

>> However, there are so many people, I can\'t go home even if I want to stay after the concert.

And except for celebrity concert, university festivals is not fun.

>> And except for celebrity concert, university festivals aren\'t fun.

So I don\'t like university festivals.

>> CORRECT!

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