homework 06.14
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What would life be like without your computer?
I often think How did people spend time in the past days when there was without computers.
Now days, develop of computers today, a lot of people the level of culture,hobbies,information,
and knowledge has increasing.
And personal computers was became a necessity.
These days, AI technology is using through computers.
Using AI, pictures,music, and presentations are make faster than humans did.
In addition, a few days ago I watched various language education programs through AI.
But, I think still there is have a misinformation and delicate work is lacking.
However, new technologies will be soon develop and they will get pros and cons.
Anyway, I cannot deny that life is comfortable through computer.
강사 첨삭
Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What would life be like without your computer?
I often think How did people spend time in the past days when there was without computers.
Please answer the question:
What would life be like without your computer?
I often think How did people spend time in the past days when there was without computers.
>> I often think how did people spend time in the past when there was no computers.
OR >> I often think how did people spend time in the past when computers weren\'t discovered yet.
Now days, develop of computers today, a lot of people the level of culture,hobbies,information, and knowledge has increasing.
>> Nowadays, because of the development of computers, a lot of people increased the level of culture, hobbies, information, and knowledge.
And personal computers was became a necessity.
And personal computers was became a necessity.
>> Personal computers have become a necessity.
These days, AI technology is using through computers.
>> These days, AI technology is used in computers.
Using AI, pictures,music, and presentations are make faster than humans did.
>> Using AI, pictures, music, and presentations are made faster than what humans normally do.
In addition, a few days ago I watched various language education programs through AI.
>> CORRECT!
But, I think still there is have a misinformation and delicate work is lacking.
But, I think still there is have a misinformation and delicate work is lacking.
>> But, I think misinformation is widespread and delicate work is still lacking.
However, new technologies will be soon develop and they will get pros and cons.
>> However, new technologies will soon be developed, and as expected, there would be pros and cons.
Anyway, I cannot deny that life is comfortable through computer.
>> Anyway, I cannot deny that life is comfortable with computers.
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