homework 06.23
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, do you think it\'s always safe to use e-wallets?
I don\'t think e-wallets perfectly safe.
I always use e-wallets. It\'s the biggest advantage is convenience.
But, it\'s deadly disadvantage is easy to be swindled or phishing.
I\'m using \"Kakao-Pay\" among them many e-wallets.
But, a few month ago I had a fatal flaw of Kakao-pay.
When I at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay for buy the some food, buy it failed.
And I also failed map application,messenger and transportation card from made by Kakao.
The reason why, Kakao\'s building broke out fire, so all Kakao\'s services were stoped.
Even them, I saw the news, someone who person can\'t checked e-mail box about a company interview.
So, this person failed this company.
Fortunately, I solved some problem through my cash.
So, I don\'t perfectly trust.
강사 첨삭
Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, do you think it\'s always safe to use e-wallets?
I don\'t think e-wallets perfectly safe.
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, do you think it\'s always safe to use e-wallets?
I don\'t think e-wallets perfectly safe.
>> I don\'t think e-wallets are perfectly safe.
I always use e-wallets.
>> CORRECT!It\'s the biggest advantage is convenience.
>> The biggest advantage is convenience.
But, it\'s deadly disadvantage is easy to be swindled or phishing.
>> But, its deadly disadvantage is that it\'s easy to be swindled or to be a victim of phishing.
I\'m using \"Kakao-Pay\" among them many e-wallets.
>> Among the e-wallets, I use \"Kakao-Pay\".
But, a few month ago I had a fatal flaw of Kakao-pay.
>> But, a few months ago, there was a major flaw of using Kakao-pay.
When I at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay for buy the some food, buy it failed.
>> When I was at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay to buy some food, buy it failed.
And I also failed map application,messenger and transportation card from made by Kakao.
>> Some applications also can\'t be used like map, messenger, and transportation card made by Kakao.
The reason why, Kakao\'s building broke out fire, so all Kakao\'s services were stoped.
>> The reason why all services stopped is because Kakao\'s was on fire.
Even them, I saw the news, someone who person can\'t checked e-mail box about a company interview.
>> Even them, I saw the news, someone didn\'t check the e-mail inbox about the company interview.
So, this person failed this company.
So, this person failed this company.
>> CORRECT!
Fortunately, I solved some problem through my cash.
Fortunately, I solved some problem through my cash.
>> CORRECT!
So, I don\'t perfectly trust.
So, I don\'t perfectly trust.
>> So, I don\'t perfectly trust it.
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