homework 06.23

2023-06-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: In your opinion, do you think it\'s always safe to use e-wallets? I don\'t think e-wallets perfectly safe. I always use e-wallets. It\'s the biggest advantage is convenience. But, it\'s deadly disadvantage is easy to be swindled or phishing. I\'m using \"Kakao-Pay\" among them many e-wallets. But, a few month ago I had a fatal flaw of Kakao-pay. When I at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay for buy the some food, buy it failed. And I also failed map application,messenger and transportation card from made by Kakao. The reason why, Kakao\'s building broke out fire, so all Kakao\'s services were stoped. Even them, I saw the news, someone who person can\'t checked e-mail box about a company interview. So, this person failed this company. Fortunately, I solved some problem through my cash. So, I don\'t perfectly trust.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, do you think it\'s always safe to use e-wallets?

I don\'t think e-wallets perfectly safe.
>>  I don\'t think e-wallets are perfectly safe.
I always use e-wallets. 
>> CORRECT!
It\'s the biggest advantage is convenience.
>> The biggest advantage is convenience.
But, it\'s deadly disadvantage is easy to be swindled or phishing.
>> But, its deadly disadvantage is that it\'s easy to be swindled or to be a victim of phishing.
I\'m using \"Kakao-Pay\" among them many e-wallets.
>> Among the e-wallets, I use \"Kakao-Pay\".
But, a few month ago I had a fatal flaw of Kakao-pay.
>> But, a few months ago, there was a major flaw of using Kakao-pay.
When I at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay for buy the some food, buy it failed.
>> When I was at the convenience store, I used Kakao-pay to buy some food, buy it failed.
And I also failed map application,messenger and transportation card from made by Kakao.
>> Some applications also can\'t be used like map, messenger, and transportation card made by Kakao.
The reason why, Kakao\'s building broke out fire, so all Kakao\'s services were stoped.
>> The reason why all services stopped is because Kakao\'s was on fire. 
Even them, I saw the news, someone who person can\'t checked e-mail box about a company interview.
>> Even them, I saw the news, someone didn\'t check the e-mail inbox about the company interview.
So, this person failed this company.
>> CORRECT!
Fortunately, I solved some problem through my cash.
>> CORRECT!
So, I don\'t perfectly trust.
>> So, I don\'t perfectly trust it.

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