homework 06.29
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think are the most dangerous jobs?
There are many dangerous jobs in the world.
Construction workers, firefighters, police, miners, fishermen, etc.
Among them, I think dangerous job is ocean fishing vessel(원양 어선).
They\'re fishermen, but it is some special.
Once they are out in the ocean, during a few weeks at least or months at most they are catch the fish.
But, everything in the sea is dangerous.
If break down they\'re ship, they are should fixed own.
Can be hurt by equipment(net, fishing needle).
If they\'re sick, They can\'t go to the hospital.
And work difficulty is extreme hard.
So, wages are very high.
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Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think are the most dangerous jobs?
There are many dangerous jobs in the world.
Please answer the question:
What do you think are the most dangerous jobs?
There are many dangerous jobs in the world.
>> CORRECT!
Construction workers, firefighters, police, miners, fishermen, etc.
Construction workers, firefighters, police, miners, fishermen, etc.
>> There are construction workers, firefighters, police, miners, fishermen, and many more.
Among them, I think dangerous job is ocean fishing vessel(원양 어선).
>> Among them, I think the most dangerous job is ocean fishing vessel(원양 어선).
They\'re fishermen, but it is some special.
>> They\'re fishermen, but it is a bit more special.
Once they are out in the ocean, during a few weeks at least or months at most they are catch the fish.
>> Once they are out in the ocean, during a few weeks at least, or months at most, they catch fish.
But, everything in the sea is dangerous.
But, everything in the sea is dangerous.
>> CORRECT!
If break down they\'re ship, they are should fixed own.
If break down they\'re ship, they are should fixed own.
>> If their ship breaks down, they should fix it on their own.
Can be hurt by equipment(net, fishing needle).
>> It can be because of their equipment (net, fishing needle).
If they\'re sick, They can\'t go to the hospital.
>> If they\'re sick, they can\'t go to the hospital.
And work difficulty is extreme hard.
>> And the nature of their work is extremely hard.
So, wages are very high.
>> CORRECT!
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