homework 07.03
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the disadvantages of hoarding?
There are many kinds of hoarding.
Among them of hoarding, limited edition items, concert tickets, and during the pandemic season,
there was also a hoarding of masks and cold medicine.
A few days ago, \'Bruno Mars\' concert held in Korea, and the ticket price was very expensive.
It\'s because of the hoarders.
Anyway, there are many disadvantages of hoarding.
First of all, if I want buy what items, but I worried about items price.
The reason why, hoarders buys items quickly more than normal people.
And then later, items become the sold out, the hoarders sell items more higher price.
Besides, we can\'t win to them. They are using a computer programs.
So, these days the law has changed to illegal hoarding for prevent hoarding.
But, I don\'t know the effect about changed law.
Still I can find hoarder to easy
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the disadvantages of hoarding?
There are many kinds of hoarding.
Please answer the question:
What are the disadvantages of hoarding?
There are many kinds of hoarding.
>> CORRECT!
Among them of hoarding, limited edition items, concert tickets, and during the pandemic season,
there was also a hoarding of masks and cold medicine.
there was also a hoarding of masks and cold medicine.
>> There are different kinds of hoarding, like hoarding of limited edition items, concert tickets, and during the pandemic season, there was also hoarding of masks and cold medicines.
A few days ago, \'Bruno Mars\' concert held in Korea, and the ticket price was very expensive.
A few days ago, \'Bruno Mars\' concert held in Korea, and the ticket price was very expensive.
>> A few days ago, there was \'Bruno Mars\' concert held in Korea, and the ticket price was very expensive.
It\'s because of the hoarders.
>> CORRECT!
Anyway, there are many disadvantages of hoarding.>> CORRECT!
First of all, if I want buy what items, but I worried about items price.>> First of all, if I want to buy items, I feel worried about the item\'s price.
The reason why, hoarders buys items quickly more than normal people.
>> That\'s the reason why hoarders buy items quickly more than normal people.
And then later, items become the sold out, the hoarders sell items more higher price.
>> And then later, items become sold out; the hoarders sell items higher more than the normal price.
Besides, we can\'t win to them.
>> Besides, we can\'t win against them.
They are using a computer programs.
>> They are using computer programs.
So, these days the law has changed to illegal hoarding for prevent hoarding.
>> So, these days the law has changed to illegal hoarding to prevent people from hoarding.
But, I don\'t know the effect about changed law.
>> But, I don\'t know the effect of the changed law.
Still I can find hoarder to easy
>> Still, I can find hoarders easily.
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