homework 07.06

2023-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How useful are computers to you? Computer is a friend to me. When I through a computers, get a information, buy a items, play a games and study. Furthermore, these days almost company works using a computer. So, if we have an internet problem, we can not do anything. it\'s a big weakness. That being said, I saw and learned many things(information) through an internet. So, I think positive about computers. If in the earth was no computers, we must spend boring time. Even than, If I fall in the desert island I\'ll no matter the cost take an internet able computer. I like computers that much.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How useful are computers to you?

Computer is a friend to me.

>> CORRECT!

When I through a computers, get a information, buy a items, play a games and study.

>> Through computers I can get information, buy items, play games, and study.

Furthermore, these days almost company works using a computer.

>> Furthermore, these days, almost all company works are done using a computer.

So, if we have an internet problem, we can not do anything. it\'s a big weakness.

>> So, if we have an internet problem, we cannot do anything. It\'s a big weakness.

That being said, I saw and learned many things(information) through an internet.

>> That being said, I saw and learned many things (information) through the internet.

So, I think positive about computers.

>> CORRECT!

If in the earth was no computers, we must spend boring time.

>> If there were no computers, we would definitely be spending a boring time.

Even than, If I fall in the desert island I\'ll no matter the cost take an internet able computer.

>> Even then, if I fall in a deserted island, no matter the cost, I will make a way to take the internet there to be able to use a computer.

I like computers that much.

>> CORRECT!

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