homework 07.10

2023-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What culture aside from your own do you find interesting? Why? When I travel abroad, I feel the cultural difference of other countries. Even in Japan, near to Korea, there is a big difference in culture. So, I try to understand there culture. I am interesting in languages among the various cultures. I experienced when I visit to Europe in last April. I went Germany,Belgium and France. These three countries are near to each other. But, these countries using a different languages. Among these countries, I feel Belgium is special. Belgium don\'t have it\'s own language. So, there people using three languages. It using French, Dutch and German. Among them, Belgium use a lot of French. And in common these countries people used well English. So, I was amazed because It\'s near to countries, but these countries language is different.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What culture aside from your own do you find interesting? Why?

When I travel abroad, I feel the cultural difference of other countries.

>> When I traveled abroad, I felt the cultural difference of other countries.

Even in Japan, near to Korea, there is a big difference in culture.

>> Even in Japan, which is near to Korea, there is a big difference in culture.

So, I try to understand there culture.

>> So, I try to understand their culture.

I am interesting in languages among the various cultures.

>> I am interested in languages of all countries.

I experienced when I visit to Europe in last April.

>> I experienced it when I visited Europe last April.

I went Germany,Belgium and France.

>> I went to Germany, Belgium, and France.

These three countries are near to each other.

>> CORRECT!
But, these countries using a different languages.

>> But, these countries use different languages.

Among these countries, I feel Belgium is special.

>> Among these countries, I feel like Belgium is special.

OR >> Among these countries, I think Belgium is special.

Belgium don\'t have it\'s own language.

>> Belgium doesn\'t have its own language.

So, there people using three languages.

>> So, people in Belgium use three languages.

It using French, Dutch and German.

>> They use French, Dutch, and German.

Among them, Belgium use a lot of French.

>> Among them, French is widely used in Belgium.

And in common these countries people used well English.

>> And in common, people in these countries use English well.

So, I was amazed because It\'s near to countries, but these countries language is different.

>> So, I was amazed because these near countries are near each other, but they use different languages.

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