homework 07.13

2023-07-14 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Are there any special events that take place in summer in your country? Various events are held during the summer season in Korea. Since a few years ago, among the most popular events are \"Water bomb\" and singer Psy\'s \"SUMMER SWAG\". The two events have in common is a music festical that uses a lot of water. In the case of water bamb event is many singers and celebrities perform a concert. And they are enjoy the festival by shooting water guns with the audience. Next, in the case of Psy\'s Summer swag, Psy and some singers perform together. This event uses a lot of water during the performance. So many people sing along to his songs and reduce stress in the cool water from hot day. Actually, I don\'t know these events, because I have not been to these events. Still, I heard from people around me about this events, it is very fun and reviews it\'s good.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are there any special events that take place in summer in your country?

Various events are held during the summer season in Korea.

>> CORRECT!
Since a few years ago, among the most popular events are \"Water bomb\" and singer Psy\'s
\"SUMMER SWAG\".

>> CORRECT!
The two events have in common is a music festical that uses a lot of water.

>> The two events that have in common is a music festival that uses a lot of water.

In the case of water bamb event is many singers and celebrities perform a concert.

>> In the case of water bomb event, there are many singers and celebrities that perform a concert.

And they are enjoy the festival by shooting water guns with the audience.

>> And they enjoy the festival by shooting water guns with the audience.

Next, in the case of Psy\'s Summer swag, Psy and some singers perform together.

>> CORRECT!
This event uses a lot of water during the performance.

>> CORRECT!
So many people sing along to his songs and reduce stress in the cool water from hot day.

>> So many people sing along to his songs and reduce stress in the cool water from a hot day.

Actually, I don\'t know these events, because I have not been to these events.

>> CORRECT!
Still, I heard from people around me about this events, it is very fun and reviews it\'s good.

>> Still, I heard from people around me about this events, it is very fun and the reviews are good.

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