homework 07.14

2023-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Do you prefer living in the city or in the countryside? I prefer to live in the city more than countryside. That\'s way city life is convenient. The advantage of city I think that cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store, public transportation and etc.. so city is convenient. On the other hands, in the case of countryside I feel doesn\'t convenient. I occasionally visit my grand mother\'s house. Her house location is the countryside of countryside. There is no convenience store and no convenient facilities, So, I don\'t well understand why my parents and grand mother prefer countryside. But, these day\'s my thinks are changing little by little. The idea is that if I live in the other house later, I want live in the country near the city.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer living in the city or in the countryside?

I prefer to live in the city more than countryside.

>> I prefer to live in the city more than the countryside.

That\'s way city life is convenient.

>> That\'s because the city life is convenient.

The advantage of city I think that cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store,
public transportation and etc.. so city is convenient.

>> The advantages of living in the city I think is that everyone has access to cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store, public transportation and many more, so living in the city is convenient.
On the other hands, in the case of countryside I feel doesn\'t convenient.

>> On the other hand, in the case of the countryside, I feel like it isn\'t convenient.

I occasionally visit my grandmother\'s house.

>> CORRECT!
Her house location is the countryside of countryside.

>> Her house\'s location is in the countryside.

There is no convenience store and no convenient facilities,
So, I don\'t well understand why my parents and grand mother prefer countryside.

>> There are no convenience stores and no convenient facilities, so I don\'t understand why my parents and grandmother prefer living in the countryside.
But, these day\'s my thinks are changing little by little.

>> But these days, my thoughts about it change little by little.

The idea is that if I live in the other house later, I want live in the country near the city.

>> The idea is that if I live in another house later on, I want live in the countryside near the city.

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