homework 07.18
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can money buy happiness?
Money is essential element in modern society.
If I have no money, my life is poor life.
In contrast, If I have lots of money, my life is leisurely life.
The more money have, the more comfortable life will change.
However, even if I have a lot of money and have a big disease or mental health is not good.
Then, I think money is useless.
Because, it is difficult to solve these things if I have a lot of money.
In short, I think about this topic.
The more money have, the happier can be, but, I don\'t think money can buy everything.
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Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can money buy happiness?
Money is essential element in modern society.
Please answer the question:
Can money buy happiness?
Money is essential element in modern society.
>> Money is an essential element in modern society.
OR >> Money is essential in modern society.
If I have no money, my life is poor life.
>> If I have no money, I would suffer from a poor life.
In contrast, If I have lots of money, my life is leisurely life.
>> In contrast, if I have lots of money, I would be enjoying a luxurious life.
The more money have, the more comfortable life will change.
>> The more money I have, the more comfortable my life will be.
However, even if I have a lot of money and have a big disease or mental health is not good.
>> However, even if I have a lot of money and have a big disease or if my mental health is at risk, it\'s not good.
Then, I think money is useless.
Then, I think money is useless.
>> CORRECT!
Because, it is difficult to solve these things if I have a lot of money.
Because, it is difficult to solve these things if I have a lot of money.
>> CORRECT!
In short, I think about this topic.
In short, I think about this topic.
>> CORRECT!
The more money have, the happier can be, but, I don\'t think money can buy everything.
The more money have, the happier can be, but, I don\'t think money can buy everything.
>> The more money I have, the happier I can be, but, I don\'t think money can buy everything.
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