homework 08.16

2023-08-17 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Do you prefer watching movies in theaters or at home? When I choose a movie place, I according to the genre of the movie. My favorite genres are action, music, true story and on various movies. In my opinion, I feel that in these movies important concentration and sound. That\'s why if I watch these movies, I prefer the movie theaters. On the contrary, the movies play time\'s too long or a calm movie, it makes me lose concentration and tired. So, if I watch these movies, I prefer watch at home. I think it ways concentrate better than other places.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer watching movies in theaters or at home?

When I choose a movie place, I according to the genre of the movie.
>> When I choose a movie place, I also consider the genre of the movie.
My favorite genres are action, music, true story and on various movies.
>> My favorite genres are action, music, true story, and other various movies.
In my opinion, I feel that in these movies important concentration and sound.
>> In my opinion, I feel that in these movies, it is important to consider your concentration and the sound.
That\'s why if I watch these movies, I prefer the movie theaters.
>> CORRECT!
On the contrary, the movies play time\'s too long or a calm movie,
it makes me lose concentration and tired.
>> On the contrary, if the movie\'s running time is too long, or if it\'s a calm movie, it makes me lose concentration and feel tired.
So, if I watch these movies, I prefer watch at home.
>> CORRECT!
I think it ways concentrate better than other places.
>> I think it makes us concentrate better than other places.

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