homework 08.21

2023-08-21 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the advantages of being bilingual? Using multiple languages(bilingual) has many advantages. I think, South Korea is an isolated country like an island country. Because, we can\'t go north side and we have to take a ship or plane to go to other countries. So, I think learning English or other language has many advantages in Korea. One of the advantages is I experienced When I went on a trip abroad. After learning speak English from Camille teacher, I had many new experiences when I went abroad. It solved many language barriers. So I gained more English confidence than before I learn speak English and motivated me to English. I want to master English and I\'ll try a lot.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages of being bilingual?

Using multiple languages(bilingual) has many advantages.
>> CORRECT!
I think, South Korea is an isolated country like an island country.
>> CORRECT!
Because, we can\'t go north side and we have to take a ship or plane to go to other countries.
>> CORRECT!
So, I think learning English or other language has many advantages in Korea.
>> So, I think learning English or other languages has many advantages in Korea.
One of the advantages is I experienced When I went on a trip abroad.
>> One of the advantages is what I experienced when I went on a trip abroad.
After learning speak English from Camille teacher, I had many new experiences when I went abroad.
>>  After learning how to speak English from Teacher Camille, I had many new experiences when I went abroad.
It solved many language barriers.
>> CORRECT!
So I gained more English confidence than before I learn speak English and motivated me to English.
>> So I gained more confidence in speaking the English language than before, I learned how to speak in English, and it motivated me to improve my English skills.
I want to master English and I\'ll try a lot.
>> CORRECT!

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