homework 09.04

2023-09-05 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Do you think domestic violence exists in all social classes? First of all, domestic violence is should never happen. Domestic violence are happend in all social classes. Sometimes I watched about these news and media. Among the victims are home runaway teenagers, wives and even husbands. But, their all said in an interview this crime\'s punishment is very low. Because most first-time punishment offenders are received probation. So, victims live in fear of retaliations. I want high punishment of these crimes.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think domestic violence exists in all social classes?

First of all, domestic violence is should never happen.

>> First of all, domestic violence should never happen.

Domestic violence are happend in all social classes.

>> Domestic violence happen in all social classes.

Sometimes I watched about these news and media.

>> Sometimes I watch about these news and media.

Among the victims are home runaway teenagers, wives and even husbands.

>> CORRECT!
But, their all said in an interview this crime\'s punishment is very low.

>> But, they all said in an interview this crime\'s punishment is very low.

Because most first-time punishment offenders are received probation.

>> Because most first-time punishment offenders receive probation.

OR >> That\'s because most first-time punishment offenders are under probation.

So, victims live in fear of retaliations.

>> CORRECT!
I want high punishment of these crimes.

>> I want high punishment for these crimes.

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