homework 09.08

2023-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the advantages and disadvantages of living abroad? In my opinion, living abroad is a good chance in life. I think advantages are it can build independence and confidence. If I go aboroad, everything behavior is a challenge. For example, order the food, buying clothes, finding accommondation. So, everything have to solve on my own, and If I don\'t move, I can\'t do anything. And, I think disadvantages is adapt. If I living abroad, I have to change everything. I\'ll must to change the food style, language, culture, and more. In addition, it would be lonely if I go abroad alone without family or friends. So I think, adapt is very difficult.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of living abroad?

In my opinion, living abroad is a good chance in life.

>> CORRECT!
I think advantages are it can build independence and confidence.

>> I think the advantages are building independence and confidence.

If I go aboroad, everything behavior is a challenge.

>> If I go aboroad, everything would be a challenge.

For example, order the food, buying clothes, finding accommondation.

>> For example, ordering food, buying clothes, and finding an accommondation would be a tough situation.

So, everything have to solve on my own, and If I don\'t move, I can\'t do anything.

>> So, everything should be solved on my own; and If I don\'t move, I can\'t do anything.

And, I think disadvantages is adapt.

>> And, I think the disadvantage is adapting to the changes.

If I living abroad, I have to change everything.

>> If I live abroad, I have to change everything.

I\'ll must to change the food style, language, culture, and more.

>> I must adapt to the changes in food, language, culture, and more.

In addition, it would be lonely if I go abroad alone without family or friends.

>> In addition, it would be lonely if I go abroad alone without my family or friends.

So I think, adapt is very difficult.

>> So I think adapting is very difficult.

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