homework 09.18
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
When do you prefer to have a family gathering?
As far as I know, there is in Korea culture that respect families and adults.
So, there were many days when family members gathering and met for adults.
For example, the birthday of relative, the anniversary of I don\'t know relative, etc.
But these days, this kinds of days disappear .
Because, everyone is busy.
So I think, it\'s good for a family to meet twice a year.
Because, I like my relatives meet in a long time.
But, there are often happened uncomfortable situations.
That\'s why I fell like or dislike the day when my family gathering together.
강사 첨삭
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Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
When do you prefer to have a family gathering?
As far as I know, there is in Korea culture that respect families and adults.
Please answer the question:
When do you prefer to have a family gathering?
As far as I know, there is in Korea culture that respect families and adults.
>> As far as I know, there is a Korean culture that we should respect families and adults.
So, there were many days when family members gathering and met for adults.
>> So, there were many days when family members gather and meet adults.
For example, the birthday of relative, the anniversary of I don\'t know relative, etc.
>> Birthdays of relatives and the anniversaries of relatives I don\'t know are examples of these gatherings.
But these days, this kinds of days disappear .
>> But these days, these kinds of days have disappeared.
Because, everyone is busy.
>> That\'s because everyone is busy.
So I think, it\'s good for a family to meet twice a year.
>> CORRECT!
Because, I like my relatives meet in a long time.
>> >> That\'s because I would like to meet my relatives after a long time.
But, there are often happened uncomfortable situations.
>> But, there are uncomfortable situations that often happen.
That\'s why I fell like or dislike the day when my family gathering together.
>> That\'s why I dislike the day when my family gathers together.
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