homework 09.22

2023-09-22 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Should companies ban their employees from using social networking sites at work? In my opinion, if we don\'t free time, it\'s not good to do social networking sites. Because, there is a working place. A few years ago YouTube became popular in Korea, and even office employees YouTubers are popular. They are did filmed, edited, and posted their daily life on YouTube while working at their company. But, there are many company don\'t like this behavior. Because they work for their social media instead of main job at the company. I think, except in special cases, it\'s not a good idea to do social networking for a long time during work.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

>> In my opinion, if we don\'t have free time, it\'s not good to do social networking sites.

Because, there is a working place.

>> That\'s because it is our work place.

A few years ago YouTube became popular in Korea, and even office employees YouTubers are popular.

>> CORRECT!

They are did filmed, edited, and posted their daily life on YouTube while working at their company.

>> They film, edit, and post their daily life on YouTube while working in their company.

But, there are many company don\'t like this behavior.

>> But, there are many companies that don\'t like this behavior.

Because they work for their social media instead of main job at the company.

>> It\'s because they work for their social media instead of their main job in the company.

I think, except in special cases, it\'s not a good idea to do social networking for a long time during work.

>> CORRECT!

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