Homework(1/13): What do i like about my age now?

2017-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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My Teacher, J.C.M. Have a happy weekend with your family. = body = Today's essay title, "What do like about your age now?", seems to be wrong. I think this title, ""What do i like about your age now?",is correct, right? I can not interpret correctly, so I will write as I think. My age is almost 60. In my 40s I was confident in everything. However, from the time I was in my 50s, I became to lose the confident. I thought I could do it both mentally and physically, but I was already treated as an elderly person in society. I have been being very eager to work out, play guitar, learn English and so on. The reason I have worked hard was intention to resist this social phenomenon. I still think I can be healthy, vivid and can do anything. Despite this resistance, society still thinks that 50s is old people. Just as I thought about the old when I was young. I will still resist the prejudice against the age to the end. I do not want to get older anymore. My mental age is still bloody 18.

강사 첨삭

Heheheh, Oh!!!!

Sorry for the mistake!!! Getting old is a privilege because we become wiser...we can understand other people\'s circumstance and that\'s the greatest part of it. We\'ve learned a lot from our experiences which made us a better person.

The good thing about getting old is that we know that doing the right things will lead to a happy life. With no regrets!!!!

T. Jeny


My Teacher, J.C.M.

>>correct
 Have a happy weekend with your family.
>>correct
= body =
Today\'s essay title, \"What do like about your age now?\", seems to be wrong.

>>Today\'s essay title, \"What do  you like about your age now?\", seems to be wrong. (sorry)
 I think this title, \"\"What do i like about your age now?\",is correct, right?

>>correct
 I can not interpret correctly, so I will write as I think.

>>I can\'t interpret so I will just write what I know.
 My age is almost 60.

>>correct
 In my 40s I was confident in everything.

>>correct
 However, from the time I was in my 50s, I became to lose the confident.

>> However, from the time I was in my 50s, I begun to lose the confidence.
 I thought I could do it both mentally and physically, but I was already treated as an elderly person in society.

>>I thought, I could do both mentally and physically, but I was already treated as an elderly person in the society.

I have been being very eager to work out, play guitar, learn English and so on.

>>I have been very eager to work out, play the guitar, learn English and so on.
 The reason I have worked hard was intention to resist this social phenomenon. 

>>My intention of working hard was to resist this social phenomenon. 
 I still think I can be healthy, vivid and can do anything.

>>correct
 Despite this resistance, society still thinks that 50s is old people.

>>Despite this resistance, society still thinks that 50s is already old.

Just as I thought about the old when I was young. 

>>I just thought about the old people when I was young.
 I will still resist the prejudice against the age to the end.

>>correct
 I do not want to get older anymore. My mental age is still bloody 18.

>>correct

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