Homework 1.16
학생이 쓴 원문
I went to the starbucks in neighborhood town on Saturday, and I studied for 4 hours.
I reviewed what I learned about semiconductor. It\'s important to understand the follow of electrons and holes in Semiconductor.
And then, I went to an Okonomiyaki restaurants where my friend has been working. She gave me a discount around 50%. It was so big and cheap. I saw her make my Okonomiyaki. I wanted to talk her more. But because there was crowded, I couldn\'t.
After arriving in my town, I met two friends near by dormitory to drink. We walked around town for one hours but we couldn\'t find empty restaurants. So we went to shop at the supermarket and bought some snacks and alchol, and went to my friend\'s place.
I drank a lot this day, so I was drunk.
I had plans going to the downtown but I couldn\'t go there.
I slept a lot all day yesterday.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
It was very good to see you today in spite of the drink you had the day before. Setting your priorities is paramount to your success. You can drink but study very hard for your future. Of course, you need a social network for your career. So, drink moderately and responsibly.
I can see that you have many good friends who are wither working or belonging to the international group. Learn from them and share the skill you possess to have a two-way-street connection with them.
Below, analyze the suggestions underscored in your essay. Some contain proper capitalization and spelling. For the others, discover them as you read through.
Rest well and study, study, study.
See you.
-T. Donna~
I reviewed what I learned about semiconductor. It\'s important to understand the follow of electrons and holes in Semiconductor.
And then, I went to an Okonomiyaki restaurants where my friend has been working. She gave me a discount around 50%. It was so big and cheap. I saw her make my Okonomiyaki. I wanted to talk her more. But because there was crowded, I couldn\'t.
>>> I went to Starbucks in the neighborhood on Saturday, and I studied for 4 hours.
I reviewed what I learned about semiconductor. It\'s important to understand the flow of electrons and holes in semiconductors.And then, I went to an Okonomiyaki restaurants where my friend has been working. She gave me a discount around 50%. It was so big and cheap. I saw her make my Okonomiyaki. I wanted to talk to her more but because it was crowded, I couldn\'t.
After arriving in my town, I met two friends near by dormitory to drink. We walked around town for one hours but we couldn\'t find empty restaurants. So we went to shop at the supermarket and bought some snacks and alchol, and went to my friend\'s place.
I drank a lot this day, so I was drunk.
I had plans going to the downtown but I couldn\'t go there.
I slept a lot all day yesterday.
>>> After arriving in my town, I met two friends nearby my dormitory to drink. We walked around town for one hour but we couldn\'t find empty restaurants. So we went to shop at the supermarket and bought some snacks and alcohol, and went to my friend\'s place.
I drank a lot this day, so I was intoxicated.I had plans going downtown but I couldn\'t go there.
I slept a lot all day yesterday.
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