Homework(1/18): Do you think you have a healthy life style?

2017-01-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend Jennifer Cardenas Montero. Is your name right? haha I want not to forget your name. it is the reason i mentioned above. It's already evening. It was also a very busy day today. I am sorry for lately doing homework. See you on Friday. = body = Yes, I can confidently say that I have a healthy life style. The reasons are as follows: 1. I happily work hard. I try not to be stressed while I work if possible. 2. I do regular exercise. During weekdays,I mainly focus on exercising to relieve stress. On weekends, I always go hiking or ride a bicycle with my family. 3. I play the guitar. When I have free time or feel depressed due to stress, I usually play the guitar without any thought and the I feel very happy. 4. And above all, it is already 19th days since I quit smoking. Is there any better reason or evidence?

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh!!!

Yes, it is my real name!!!

I would like to think I am also health like you but I guess I need to change my lifestyle for this year so that I can also be healthy just like you. Thank you, Oh!!!

Take care!!!

T. Jeny


Friend Jennifer Cardenas Montero.

>>correct
 Is your name right? haha

>>correct (right)
 I want not to forget your name.

>>correct

it is the reason i mentioned above.

>>It is the reason , I mentioned it above.
 It\'s already evening.

>>correct

It was also a very busy day today.

>>correct

I am sorry for lately doing homework.

>>I am sorry for doing my homework late.
 See you on Friday.
>>correct
= body =
Yes, I can confidently say that I have a healthy life style.

>>correct
 The reasons are as follows:

>>correct
1. I happily work hard. 

>>correct
I try not to be stressed while I work if possible.
>>I try not to be stressed while I am at work if possible.

>>I try not to be stressed while I\'m working if possible.
2. I do regular exercise. 

>>correct
During weekdays,I mainly focus on exercising to relieve stress. 

>>correct 
 On weekends, I always go hiking or ride a bicycle with my family.
>>correct 
3. I play the guitar. 

>>correct 
 When I have free time or feel depressed due to stress, 

>>correct 
I usually play the guitar without any thought and the I feel very happy.
>>I usually play the guitar without thinking about anything and it makes me feel happy.
4. And above all, it is already 19th days since I quit smoking.

>>4. And above all, it is already 19 days since I quit smoking.
 Is there any better reason or evidence?

>>correct 

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