Homework 1.19
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that working on weekends improves our career more because most people take a break on weekends.
The harder we work, the more we recive the honor and the money.
However, I believe that work - life balance is the most important thing in life.
In my prospective, earning money is to enjoy life.
I have a feeling like if work makes our life harder, it can be stressful.
Today, I participated in a job consulting held on the internet. She did a lot of work, around 6 companies. And now she has been working on the LG Displace in Singapore. I really want to be like her because she has been working at IT sales department. It was helpful to learn about recruiting foreigners. I didn\'t know recruitment cite like Linked in, world job +, and so on.
After all, I felt that learning English is the most important thing to get a job.
So, I\'m gonna study English hard every day.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
Hard work is undeniably the first step to achieve our goals in terms of experience and our first hard-earned savings. That time, our life is hanging in an imbalance until we learn the ropes and eventually find the perfect work-life balance. It is not easy, but we have to try.
If we do not have money, it is hard to enjoy life. So we need to have endless source of money to make life more at ease.
Anyway, who is \"she\" in your second topic? Is she the recruitment consultant? There is a sea of legitimate recruitment sites that you can Google to find future job offerings that best suits your capabilities and talents.
Definitely, English is necessary to work abroad or be in an international company. So, stay disciplines, diligent, and persistent.
A usual, read and understand the underscored portions of your essay. Make sure to know the rules that govern the grammar pointers. Well done!
See you in class.
-T. Donna~
The harder we work, the more we recive the honor and the money.
However, I believe that work - life balance is the most important thing in life.
In my prospective, earning money is to enjoy life.
I have a feeling like if work makes our life harder, it can be stressful.
>>> I think that working on weekends improves our career more because most people take a break on weekends.
The harder we work, the more we receive the honor and the money.However, I believe that work - life balance is the most important thing in life.
In my perspective, earning money is to enjoy life.
I have a feeling like if work makes our life harder, it can be stressful.
Today, I participated in a job consulting held on the internet. She did a lot of work, around 6 companies. And now she has been working on the LG Displace in Singapore. I really want to be like her because she has been working at IT sales department. It was helpful to learn about recruiting foreigners. I didn\'t know recruitment cite like Linked in, world job +, and so on.
After all, I felt that learning English is the most important thing to get a job.
So, I\'m gonna study English hard every day.
>>> Today, I participated in a job consulting held on the internet. She did a lot of work, around 6 companies. And now she has been working on the LG Display in Singapore. I really want to be like her because she has been working at the IT sales department. It was helpful to learn about recruiting foreigners. I didn\'t know recruitment sites like LinkedIn, World Job +, and so on.
After all, I felt that learning English is the most important thing to get a job.So, I\'m gonna study English hard every day.
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