Homework 1

2012-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

학생이 쓴 원문

1. What is Mr. [Name] trying to teach the students in the courtyard? Mr. [Name] wants them to find their own walk through this class. Everyone's beliefs are unique, so if it is different from other's, we don't have to think that our beliefs are odd or unpopular. Because of difference, we can live different lives. Therefore, through walking in the courtyard, he wants to teach the difference and difference's greatness.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

Thank you for this wonderful composition. You did a good job writing these sentences.

Keep it up!

-Teacher Sheela -

1. What is Mr. [Name] trying to teach the students in the courtyard?
Mr. [Name] wants them to find their own walk through this class.

>>Correct.

Everyone\'s beliefs are unique, so if it is different from other\'s, we don\'t have to think that our beliefs are odd or unpopular.

>>Correct.

Because of difference, we can live different lives.

>>Because of these differences, we can live different lives.

Therefore, through walking in the courtyard, he wants to teach the difference and difference\'s greatness.

>>Therefore, through walking in the courtyard, he wants to teach them the differences among people and their greatness.

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