Homework(1/23): The best in my childhood

2017-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend J.C.M Thanks for your compliment today. Good luck! friend. = body = I lived in a very small village until my 4th grade in elementary school. Whenever I came home after school in elementary school, I threw away my school bag and went out with my friends and played all day such as marbles and tipcat. I often did not wash my hands and they turned black. In the winter, I cleaned my runny nose using hands, so my hands used to be split. I also pulled my cows with my friends and went out into the fields. When I came home, I used to cut hays to feed my cows, sometimes I swam off on a small lake. I think it was the happiest memory of my childhood. and In addition - In the second year of junior high school, I was the first in the national bible competition, I received a certificate and a note. And I did not have to buy a notebook until I graduated high school. The middle school I graduated was a Chapel School. Until then, my future hope was a clergyman. But I am an atheist now.

강사 첨삭

Hello OH !!!
Time is flying so fast like a blink of an eye. I just hope this week is going smoothly with you!
You\'ve done a great job! That\'s all that I can say with the performance you\'ve shown today! I have to say, each passing day that we\'re having classes there are some changes in you. It may not lead you right away to the perfection and mastery of the language but at least you\'re getting there step by step! Never give up and just keep yourself motivated!
Take care!!!
T. Jeny

Friend J.C.M
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Thanks for your compliment today.
>>correct
Good luck! friend.
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= body =
I lived in a very small village until my 4th grade in elementary school.
>>correct
Whenever I came home after school in elementary school, I threw away my school bag and went out with my friends and played all day such as marbles and tipcat.
>>Whenever I come home from school went I was in elementary, I threw away my school bag, went out with my friends and played all day such as marbles and tipcat
I often did not wash my hands and they turned black.
>>I often did not wash my hands until it turned black.
In the winter, I cleaned my runny nose using hands, so my hands used to be split.
>>In winter, I cleaned my runny nose using hands, so my hands used to break.
I also pulled my cows with my friends and went out into the fields.
>>correct
When I came home, I used to cut hays to feed my cows, sometimes I swam off on a small lake.
>>correct
I think it was the happiest memory of my childhood.
>>correct
and In addition In the second year of junior high school, I was the first in the national bible competition,
>>In addition, in my second year of junior high school, I was the first in the national bible competition.
I received a certificate and a note.
>>correct
And I did not have to buy a notebook until I graduated high school.
>>correct
The middle school I graduated was a Chapel School.
>>In middle school, I graduated in a Chapel School.
Until then, my future hope was a clergyman.
>> Until then, I dreamt of being a clergyman.
But I am an atheist now.
>>correct

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