Homework #1

Essay question: What are your favorite outdoor activities on week ends? Explain why you love these activities? ---- I like bowling and swimming. Sometimes, I go to bowling center near by my home. When I finished my army position, I want to play exciting Sports. So, I found the sports do it myself. That's a bowling. And Swimming, too. The Sports are available do it myself(without partner) I played bowling, and played swimming everyday for 2 years. So, I can play swimming very well. At least, I can keep my body from pool. And My bowling Average is 170.(It's a high level in amateur) When my bowling ball into the Strike, I feel Great! Thesedays, Although I can't play bowling everyweekend, I try to play the Sports at my free time. Lexi, if you can play bowing, how about you going bowling-center with me? if you can't play bowling, I will teach you. byebye~

Hi [이름]! Great composition! I think you can express yourself well in writing than speaking. Hmm! Don\'t worry, you\'re getting there! As for your invitation to play bowling, I would love to. I don\'t really know how to play bowling. ( ha ha) I think I may need a hand. Anyway, please go over my corrections: Teacher Lexi :) Essay question: What are your favorite outdoor activities on week ends? Explain why you love these activities?I like bowling and swimming.>>Correct :)Sometimes, I go to bowling center near by my home.>>Sometimes I go to the bowling center nearby my home.When I finished my army position, I want to play exciting Sports.>>Correct OR: When I finished serving the army, I started to look for some exciting sports.So, I found the sports do it myself.>>So, I found the sports I like and do it myself.That\'s a  bowling. And Swimming, too.>>And those are bowling and swimming.The Sports are available do it myself(without partner)>>Those sports can be done by myself or without a partner.I played bowling, and played swimming everyday for 2 years.>>I have been playing bowling and swimming for 2 years now.So, I can play swimming very well. At least, I can keep my body from pool.>>So I can swim very well and at least I can stay in the pool.And My bowling Average is 170.(It\'s a high level in amateur)>>My bowling average is 170 which is a igh level for amateur.When my bowling ball into the Strike, I feel Great! >>When my bowling ball strikes, I feel great! Thesedays, Although I can\'t play bowling everyweekend, I try to play the Sports at my free time.>>These days, although I can\'t play bowling every weekend, I tried to play it during my free time.Lexi, if you can play bowing, how about you going bowling-center with me?>>Correct! if you can\'t play bowling, I will teach you.>>Correct! (Capitalization- If)byebye~ >>Correct! (Capitalization- Bye bye!)