Homework(1/6): values my parents pass on to me

2017-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend Jen. Let's get down to business due to char limit. My father died when i was 5 years old, and my mother also died 23 years ago. My father was a teacher at elementary school. He was most famous person within our village and i had heard from many neighbors that he was handsome and funny and honorable. I had respected my father. At that time, A teacher was one of the highest jobs. I had no choice but to study hard because i had to keep my father's honor. My mother also died 2 decades ago. she had to work hard to keep us, 3 brothers. Since the youngest child, my younger brother, got married and after a few years, she died unfortunately. she was not for her but all for us. After that, our brothers and wives have lived by themselves. If my parents are alive now, we became rich due to inheriting the heritage and we would be able to live comfortably without having to work or effort. Working hard by myself is the most values that they pass on me. Is it sad, friend? cu next Monday.

강사 첨삭

Hello OH!!!
I am sorry for what had happened to your parents; looking at it in the brighter side, it made you and your brothers strong. Now, with all the hard work that you\'ve done; can say, it is a valuable life. And you are still making it meaningful....success is in your hand, Oh!!!!
T. Jeny

Friend Jen.
>>correct
Let\'s get down to business due to char limit.
>>correct
My father died when i was 5 years old, and my mother also died 23 years ago.
>>correct
My father was a teacher at elementary school.
>>My father was n elementary school teacher.
He was most famous person within our village and i had heard from many neighbors that he was handsome, funny and honorable.
>>correct
I had respected my father.
>>correct
At that time, A teacher was one of the highest jobs.
>>correct
I had no choice but to study hard because i had to keep my father\'s honor.
>>correct
My mother also died 2 decades ago.
>>correct
she had to work hard to keep us, 3 brothers.
>>She had to work hard for her 3 sons.
Since the youngest child, my younger brother, got married and after a few years, she died unfortunately.
>>From the time my youngest brother got married, she died after a few years.
she was not for her but all for us.
>>It was for all of us.( I can\'t understand this sentence.)
After that, our brothers and wives have lived by themselves.
>> After that, my brothers and their wives have lived by themselves.
If my parents are alive now, we became rich due to inheriting the heritage and we would be able to live comfortably without having to work or effort.
>> If my parents are alive now, we might be rich due to inheriting a heritage and we would be able to live comfortably without having to work or doing any effort.
Working hard by myself is the most values that they pass on me.
>> Working hard by myself is the most valuable thing that they had passed on me.
Is it sad, friend? cu next Monday.
>>correct

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