homework 1

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1. My birthplace is famous for heavy industry.

>>My birthplace is famous for its heavy industry.

There are a lot of factories,companies, and even lots of foreign workers.

>>There are lots of factories, companies, and even foreign workers.

The atmosphere is like a gray color of city.

>>The atmosphere is gray just like the color of the city.

I think it is a perfect metaphor and many people recognize like that.

>>I think it\'s a perfect metaphor and many people recognize the city like that.

Even though this city is terrible air, I love this city and I know every inch of this city.

>>Even though the city has a terrible air, I love this city and I know every inch of it.

The best thing I though of is convenient facilities near my apartment in a walking distance.

>>The best thing for me is that there are convenient facilities near my apartment and it\'s just a walking distance.

For example, the bus stop, a big university hospital, department store, even many amenities.

>>For example, there is a bus stop, a big university hospital, a department store and there are many amenities, too.

I am appreciated that I live in here and I am happy with all things in this city.

>>I am appreciated because I live in here and I\'m happy with all of the things in this city.

2. As you know, Our intonation must be affected by where you were born.

>> As you know, our intonation is affected by the place from where we are born.

It is spontaneous.

>>CORRECT!

Korea is divided by 8 district.

>>Korea is divided into eight districts.

So It is different from each districts.

>>So the intonation is different in each district.

Actually my city\'s intonation is really unique and evaluated by people as like aggressive.

>>Actually my city\'s intonation is really unique and was evaluated by the people as aggressive.

People might consider that we are fighting each other If people have seen the conversation.

>>People might consider that we are fighting with each other if we\'re having a conversation.

This is a reality.

>>This is the reality.