Homework 1
학생이 쓴 원문
People have various opinion concerning people can\'t understand the culture of a country until they can speak the language. I believe that people can understand the culture of a country without speaking a country\'s language because there are many ways to learn other country\'s culture.
Firstly, there are many ways to understand other culture such as books, videos, and museums. For example, books give detailed information to readers and books are contained the results of researches and experiences that the writer really experienced. Also, watching videos is a good way to understand other culture because it provides visual information to views, so they can more easily understand. This examples show that even though people can\'t speak other country\'s language, they can understand the culture of a country by watching videos and reading books. It is evident that speaking other country’s language isn\'t the only way to understand their culture.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Unfortunately, I can see a repetitive style in your composition again.
It is better to read about topics to gain more information when you write.
Explore other resources to give you a better idea of how to attack a topic.
Thank you for the effort.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
People have various opinion concerning people can\'t understand the culture of a country until they can speak the language. >> People have various opinions concerning others who can\'t understand the culture of a country until they speak the language.
I believe that people can understand the culture of a country without speaking a country\'s language because there are many ways to learn other country\'s culture.
>> I believe that people can understand the culture of a country without speaking a country\'s language because there are many ways to learn about another country\'s culture.
Firstly, there are many ways to understand other culture such as books, videos, and museums.
Firstly, there are many ways to understand other culture such as books, videos, and museums.
>> Firstly, there are many ways to understand other cultures such as books, videos, and museums.
For example, books give detailed information to readers and books are contained the results of researches and experiences that the writer really experienced.
>> For example, books give detailed information to readers and they include the results of the researches and experiences of the writer.
Also, watching videos is a good way to understand other culture because it provides visual information to views, so they can more easily understand.
>> Watching videos is also a good way to understand another culture because it provides visual information on different views, so they can easily understand.
This examples show that even though people can\'t speak other country\'s language, they can understand the culture of a country by watching videos and reading books.
>> These examples show that even though people can\'t speak another country\'s language, they can understand the culture of a country by watching videos and reading books.
It is evident that speaking other country’s language isn\'t the only way to understand their culture.
>> It is evident that speaking another country’s language isn\'t the only way to understand their culture.
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