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2017-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Lorna

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What adventures would you like to go on in the future? Expand your answer. Some like to challenge and enjoy adventures, in other hands, others prefer to live stably. I think all people don't need to like adventure. If someone ask me how much I like adventures, then I would say "I don't like adventures and prefer to be stable instinctively." All of adventures or challenges I have experienced were painful and meant a competition. Nevertheless, I always look for something that is worthy for me to try challenge. Because I also know that new experience have grown me up and led me for now. So I would add these comments in the former my answer. "But I'm ready to whatever I encounter and I'll do my best to next adventures" And it would be better if I get rich and honors by next adventures!

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ian!
How are you doing?
Are you having a good Wednesday?
Good job in doing your homework.
I will see you later;

~ T. Lorna^^

Some like to challenge and enjoy adventures, in other hands, others prefer to live stably.
>> Some like to challenge and enjoy adventures, on the other hand, others prefer to live stably.
I think all people don\'t need to like adventure.
>> Correct!
If someone ask me how much I like adventures, then I would say \"I don\'t like adventures and prefer to be stable instinctively.\"
>> If someone ask me how much I like adventures, then I would say, \"I don\'t like adventures but I prefer to be stable instinctively.\"
All of adventures or challenges I have experienced were painful and meant a competition.
>> All  adventures or challenges that I have experienced were painful and meant a competition.
Nevertheless, I always look for something that is worthy for me to try challenge.
>> Nevertheless, I always look for something that is worthy for me to try as a challenge.
Because I also know that new experience have grown me up and led me for now.
>> Because I also know that experiences have grown me up and led me for who am I now.
So I would add these comments in the former my answer. \"But I\'m ready to whatever I encounter and I\'ll do my best to next adventures\"
>> Therefore I can also say that I am ready to whatever challenges I might encounter and I will do my best for it.
And it would be better if I get rich and honors by next adventures!
>> I think it would be better if I will get rich and be honored for my next adventures!

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