Homework 10
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. What changes would you like to happen in your country?
A. I want an old custom that women tend to work for men\'s(such as their husbands) family and ancestor to disapear in Korea. Many people take it for granted that women should sacrifice for their family as a mom and daughter in-law. How ridiculous is it? As every human has an equl right, there shouldn\'t be the sex discrimination. To make this thing happen, not only women but also men have to change their mind.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Thanks for sharing your thoughts here. I really appreciate the effort! ^ ^
I definitely agree. If there is one thing that should disappear in this world, that is gender discrimination. I hope that will happen soon and not later! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I want the old custom of women to work and serve their husbands, husbands\' family and ancestors to disappear in Korea.
Many people take it for granted that women should sacrifice for their family as a mom and daughter in-law.
>>CORRECT
How ridiculous is it?
>>CORRECT
As every human has an equl right, there shouldn\'t be the sex discrimination.
>>We all should have equal rights and there shouldn\'t be any gender discrimination.
To make this thing happen, not only women but also men have to change their mind.
>>To make this thing happen, not only women but also men should change their perception on this.
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