HOMEWORK 10/12, ESSAY "The first thing I notice"

Hello Oh,

Dear [Name].
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My wife and I will be traveling to celebrate 3 decades anniversary of wedding from 23th to 26th this month.

>>My wife and I will be traveling to celebrate 3 decades of our wedding anniversary from 23rd to 26th of this month.
Therefore I coudn\'t take a class during tour.

>>Therefore, I can\'t take the class during the tour.
i wnat to know your term and condition of lesson fee.

>>I want to know the term and condition of our lessons.
Due to my situation, I was wondering if there is any hindrance to your income.

>>Due to my situation, I was wondering if there will be an effect to your income.
what should I cancel or suspend ?

>>What should I do? Cancel or suspend?
I don\'t know wtat is the best in your view point.
>>I don\'t know what is the best thing to do.
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The first thing I notice about a person is face.

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If they continue lives with frown or with smile ,

>>If they always frown or smile.
Everything is displayed on their faces over the years.

>>Everything will be seen on their faces over the years.
At least for me, Smiling person is a beautiful person.

>>For me, a person who always smiles is beautiful.
There is a korea\'s proverb that 40s face should be their responsibility.

>>There is a Korean proverb that a face of a- 40 year old is their responsibility.
Therefore, from an early age, They should effort to be become so that.
>>Therefore, they should do their best to look young.

>> They should make an effort in looking young and maintaining their youthful glow.
The next thing I notice about a person is mind.

>>The next thing, I notice about a person is their mind.
Warmhearted or Coldhearted?

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