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2017-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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What are you craving for at this very moment? Why? I'm craving for playing and drinking with my friends all day. And I'm eager to take a rest, to buy anything I want and meet my favorite singer. Like this, there are numerous things that I want to do or have in the world. But we knows that what I have is limited and I cannot do all and cannot have everything. We all know about that truth and that's the reason why we are carving for doing. The best thing that I'm really craving for is to have an impossible dream, even though it's hard and doesn't make sense. There are a lot of people who live without their thoughts and philosophies. But in my case, I think that my goal have led me, grown me up for now. My goal and dream decide my next action and plan. And now, my goal is to have a conversation with global people and expand my thoughts through those experiences. This goal made me learn about English and go abroad all time Thank you for reading my composition! have a nice weekend.teacher

강사 첨삭

Have a stress-free Monday Ian!

Thanks for dropping by the board! Your composition is an eye-opening for me. You have a good point! We are all busy striving hard to earn money but we forget the most important part is to be able to set a goal and achieve it, no matter how long it takes. Keep your ideas flowing!

See you!

~T. Eunice


What are you craving for at this very moment? Why?
>> Correct!
 I\'m craving for playing and drinking with my friends all

day.
>> I\'m craving for something to drink with my friends all

day.
 And I\'m eager to take a rest, to buy anything I want and

meet my favorite singer.
>> I\'m eager to take a rest, buy everything I want and

meet my favorite singer.
 Like this, there are numerous things that I want to do or

have in the world.
>> There are numerous things that I want to do or have in

this world.
 But we knows that what I have is limited and I cannot do

all and cannot have everything.
>> But I know that what I have is limited and I cannot do and 

have everything I want.
 We all know about that truth and that\'s the reason why we

are carving for doing.
>> We all know about that truth and that\'s the reason why

we are craving to achieve everything in life.
 The best thing that I\'m really craving for is to have an

impossible dream, even though it\'s hard and doesn\'t make

sense.
>> The best thing that I\'m really craving for is to

achieve an impossible dream, even though it\'s out of

context and doesn\'t make sense.
 There are a lot of people who live without their thoughts

and philosophies.
>> Correct!
 But in my case, I think that my goal have led me, grown

me up for now.
>> But in my case, I think that my goal in life has led me

to be a grown up man.
 My goal and dream decide my next action and plan.
>> My goals and dreams help me decide my next action and

plan in life.
 And now, my goal is to have a conversation with global

people and expand my thoughts through those experiences.
>> And now, my goal is to be able to converse with various

people and expand my thoughts through those experiences.
 This goal made me learn about English and go abroad all

time.
>> This goal made me learn more about English and travel

abroad all the time.

 Thank you for reading my composition!have a nice

weekend.teacher
>> Thank you for reading my composition! Have a nice

weekend teacher.

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