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2017-10-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lorna

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Do you think a boy should pay for everything on a date? WHy? Why not? 'Gender rule" is always hot-potato in everywhere, especially in Korea. Korea has been influenced with "Confucian idea" for a long time. According to Confucian idea, rules are set depending on a gender. A man should make his family happy at first, lead his country and rule the world. And a woman should take care of her husband and offspring. These are fundamental rules of the gender in Confucian idea. So it is common for men to pay for everything on a date. But Korea began to be affected by Individualism and Feminism, which let Korea escape from old tradition. The traditional rules of gender are being broken and circumstances of economic, social are going to pursue equality nowadays. So young people in Korea try to pay half and half on a date and if there is a woman who let him pay all, then she would be easy to get blamed. And ordinary men should pay his 2 years for country, so women tend to make money more.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ian!!:)
Happy Tuesday to you.
I hope that you are doing well today.
Great job.
I\'ll see you later.

~ T. Lorna^^

\'Gender rule\" is always hot-potato in everywhere, especially in Korea.
>> Gender rule  is always a hot-potato everywhere especially in Korea.
Korea has been influenced with \"Confucian idea\" for a long time.
>> Korea has been influenced with Confucian ideas for a long time.
According to Confucian idea, rules are set depending on a gender.
>> According to Confucius,  rules are set depending on the gender.
A man should make his family happy at first, lead his country and rule the world.
>> Correct!
And a woman should take care of her husband and offspring.
>> On the other hand, a woman should take care of her husband and offsprings.
These are fundamental rules of the gender in Confucian idea.
>> These are the fundamental rules when it comes to gender in Confucian ideas.
So it is common for men to pay for everything on a date.
>> Correct!
But Korea began to be affected by Individualism and Feminism, which let Korea escape from old tradition.
>> But Korea began to be affected by Individualism and Feminism which let Korea escape from the old tradition.
The traditional rules of gender are being broken and circumstances of economic, social are going to pursue equality nowadays.
>> The traditional rules of gender are being broken and circumstances regarding economic and social are going to pursue equality nowadays.
So young people in Korea try to pay half and half on a date and if there is a woman who let him pay all, then she would be easy to get blamed.
>> So young people in Korea try to share paying the bill on a date and if there is a woman who will  let the man  pay everything then this man has the tendency to blame the woman. (Is this what you mean?)
And ordinary men should pay his 2 years for country, so women tend to make money more.
>> Moreover, ordinary men should pay 2 years of service to their country so women tend to have more time to make money compared to men.

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