Homework 10/17
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Do you think marriages based on love are more successful than arranged marriages?
I think all of marriages should be based on love.
Because a marriage is basic to make a family and offsprings that tied by love.
If I get married with a woman who I don't love, then It is hard to expect desirable family.
And I sometimes witness a lot of false and wrong examples in news.
Extreme accidents among family like these caused by no respect each other.
Even if wasn't for a marriage system like animal, I would want to make strong offsprings instinctively.
Then I have no choice but I meet a woman who I pursue, and we call it love.
But I don't mean that arranged marriages are wrong.
Because a couple who married by arrangement like my parents can make happy family, too.
If I consider the happiness as the success, marriages based on love are more likely happy than arranged marriages.
I think the more I witness counterpart, I can get the high rate of success.
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I think all of marriages should be based on love.
>> I think all marriages should be based on love.
Because a marriage is basic to make a family and offsprings that tied by love.
Because a marriage is basic to make a family and offsprings that tied by love.
>> Because marriage is the basic fundamental to make a family so it should be tied by love.
If I get married with a woman who I don\'t love, then It is hard to expect desirable family.
If I get married with a woman who I don\'t love, then It is hard to expect desirable family.
>> If I will get married with a woman whom I don\'t love then I won\'t be expecting to have desirable family with her.
And I sometimes witness a lot of false and wrong examples in news.
And I sometimes witness a lot of false and wrong examples in news.
>> I sometimes witness a lot of false and wrong examples from the news.
Extreme accidents among family like these caused by no respect each other.
Extreme accidents among family like these caused by no respect each other.
>> Extreme accidents among family are caused by no respect between husband and wife.
Even if wasn\'t for a marriage system like animal, I would want to make strong offsprings instinctively.
Even if wasn\'t for a marriage system like animal, I would want to make strong offsprings instinctively.
>> Even if it\'s not a marriage system like animals, I would still want to have my offspring instinctively.
Then I have no choice but I meet a woman who I pursue, and we call it love.
Then I have no choice but I meet a woman who I pursue, and we call it love.
>> So, I have to meet a woman whom I can pursue because of love.
But I don\'t mean that arranged marriages are wrong.
But I don\'t mean that arranged marriages are wrong.
>> Correct!
Because a couple who married by arrangement like my parents can make happy family, too.
Because a couple who married by arrangement like my parents can make happy family, too.
>> Correct!
If I consider the happiness as the success, marriages based on love are more likely happy than arranged marriages.
If I consider the happiness as the success, marriages based on love are more likely happy than arranged marriages.
>> If we consider happiness to be a success in marriage life then marriages based on love are more likely to be happy than arranged marriages.
I think the more I witness counterpart, I can get the high rate of success.
I think the more I witness counterpart, I can get the high rate of success.
>> I think the more that I can witness a counterpart from my partner then the more that I can get a high rate of success.
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