HOMEWORK 10/21, When I feel happy

2015-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend Jeny. It's nice to hear your voice again. == body == There are too many things that makes me happy. I want to write about those regardless priority. Those are the following cases as below: When ~: - I got a perfect score at your homework. - I solve program error on time. - My wife laughs out loudly with bright face. - I go to see the shows with my family like movie, musical, play. - I exercise and biking with my family. - I go out to picnic or dinner or travel . - My son and daughter get a job soon after graduation. - I drink beer or SOJU and talk to good neighbor. - I meet my best friends. - I can do my daily routines like exercising, playing guitar. - Others require me to need my help. - I receive salary. - I feel desire to do meaningful something. i have a positive character. And I give thanks to all circumstances, But, I am neither God nor honor. I am only gentleman who hope to keep it up.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh!

Doing simple things can really make us happy. I can truly say that you are doing a great job making you and your family happy.

You just have to do what s right and have a big smile on your face.

T. Jeny

 

Friend Jeny.
>>correct
It\'s nice to hear your voice again.
>>It was nice to hear your voice again.
== body ==
There are too many things that makes me happy.

>>correct
I want to write about those regardless priority.

>>I want to write about these things regardless of it\'s order.
Those are the following cases as below:

>>These are the following cases:
When ~:
- I got a perfect score at your homework.

>>I get a perfect score at my homework.
- I solve program error on time.

>>I solve an error in our program.
- My wife laughs out loudly with bright face.

>>My wife laughs out loud with a bright face.
- I go to see the shows with my family like movie, musical, play.

>>I go out and see a movie, musical or play with my family.
- I exercise and biking with my family.

>>I exercise and ride a bike with my family.
- I go out to picnic or dinner or travel .

>>I go out for a picnic, dinner or travel.
- My son and daughter get a job soon after graduation.

>>My son and daughter immediately got a job after graduation.
- I drink beer or SOJU and talk to good neighbor.

>>I drink beer or soju and talk with my neighbor.
- I meet my best friends.

>>correct
- I can do my daily routines like exercising, playing guitar.

>> I can do my daily routines like exercising and playing guitar.
- Others require me to need my help.

>>Others require me to help them.
- I receive salary.

>>I receive my salary.
- I feel desire to do meaningful something.
>>I feel I\'ve done something meaningful.

i have a positive character.

>>correct
And I give thanks to all circumstances,

>>correct
But, I am neither God nor honor.

>>But I am not God.
I am only gentleman who hope to keep it up.

>>I am only a gentleman who hope to keep it up.

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