homework 10.23
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are business trips important?
These days, the importance of business trips has decreased.
I think one of them it is because of the development of online technology.
Nevertheless, I think offline business trips are important.
The reason is that online and offline business trips are different.
I think offline still have power.
This means that there are many limitations in online.
I think we can get new experiences and know the future direction through business trips.
So, I think many people still going on offline business trips.
강사 첨삭
Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are business trips important?
These days, the importance of business trips has decreased.
Please answer the question:
Why are business trips important?
These days, the importance of business trips has decreased.
>> CORRECT!
I think one of them it is because of the development of online technology.>> I think one of them is because of the development of online technology.
Nevertheless, I think offline business trips are important.
>> Nevertheless, I think personal business trips are important.
The reason is that online and offline business trips are different.>> The reason is that online meetings and personal business trips are different.
I think offline still have power.>> I think personal business trips still have power.
This means that there are many limitations in online.
>> This means that there are many limitations online.
I think we can get new experiences and know the future direction through business trips.
>> CORRECT!
So, I think many people still going on offline business trips.>> So, I think many people still go for personal business trips.
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