Homework 10/23
학생이 쓴 원문
What is the minimum voting age in your country?
The minimum voting age is 19 in global age in Korea.
Anyone who passed their nineteenth birthday can take part in national vote.
However, there is a ironic thing here and it has been also hot-potato for now.
As you know, every men in Korea should serve in a military as a mandatory duty.
The important thing is that they start their service from eighteen-years old.
Although people usually apply their service field and time that they want.
Somebody ask, "Why is a duty coming ahead than a right?"
This issue not only show the superficial difference, but also the symbolic meaning between right and duty against a nation.
One of minor parties sued this problem just before president election, but it wasn't legislated at that time.
Because it would be favor to minor parties that have a progressive tendency and usually the young students also support the progressive party.
Anyway, I just think that duties and rights always should come together.
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Hey there, Ian!:)
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How is your work as well?
You are doing an amazing job by doing your homework always.
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The minimum voting age is 19 in global age in Korea.
>> The minimum voting age in Korea is 19 in global age.
Anyone who passed their nineteenth birthday can take part in national vote.
Anyone who passed their nineteenth birthday can take part in national vote.
>> Anyone who passed their nineteenth birthday can take part in national voting.
However, there is a ironic thing here and it has been also hot-potato for now.
However, there is a ironic thing here and it has been also hot-potato for now.
>> However, there is an ironic thing here and it has been also a hot-potato for now.
As you know, every men in Korea should serve in a military as a mandatory duty.
As you know, every men in Korea should serve in a military as a mandatory duty.
>> As you know, every men in Korea should serve in the military as a mandatory duty.
The important thing is that they start their service from eighteen-years old.
The important thing is that they start their service from eighteen-years old.
>> The important thing is that they start their service from eighteen-years of age.
OR:
>> The important thing is that they start their service at the age of eighteen.
Although people usually apply their service field and time that they want.
>> Although people usually apply for their service at the field at anytime they want.
Somebody ask, \"Why is a duty coming ahead than a right?\"
Somebody ask, \"Why is a duty coming ahead than a right?\"
>> Somebody might ask, \"Why is it that a duty comes ahead than a right?\"
This issue not only show the superficial difference, but also the symbolic meaning between right and duty against a nation.
This issue not only show the superficial difference, but also the symbolic meaning between right and duty against a nation.
>> This issue doesn\'t only show the superficial difference between a right and a duty, but also the symbolic meaning of it against a nation.
One of minor parties sued this problem just before president election, but it wasn\'t legislated at that time.
One of minor parties sued this problem just before president election, but it wasn\'t legislated at that time.
>> One of the minor parties sued this problem just before our president\'s election but it wasn\'t yet legislated at that time.
Because it would be favor to minor parties that have a progressive tendency and usually the young students also support the progressive party.
Because it would be favor to minor parties that have a progressive tendency and usually the young students also support the progressive party.
>> Because it could favor minor parties that have a tendency to progress and usually, young students support a progressive party.
Anyway, I just think that duties and rights always should come together.
Anyway, I just think that duties and rights always should come together.
>> Anyway, I just think that duties and rights should always come together.
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