homework 10.24

2023-10-24 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the advantages of multitasking? I think the advantages of multitasking are different on the job. Among the many jobs, especially customer service or telephone consultants, doing a lot of multitasking. They find the customer wants information and speak at the same time. The advantage of this is that we can solve work and save time. So these jobs is essential the multitasking. But, except for the above jobs. I think many jobs owner seem to avoid multitasking. One of the reasons is that the quality of work is poor. So, I think the pros and cons of multitasking this seem to vary depending on the jobs.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages of multitasking?

I think the advantages of multitasking are different on the job.

>> I think the advantages of multitasking are different, depending on the job.

Among the many jobs, especially customer service or telephone consultants, doing a lot of multitasking.

>> Among many jobs, especially customer service or telephone consultants, do a lot of multitasking.

OR >> Among many jobs, especially customer service or telephone consultants, require multitasking.

They find the customer wants information and speak at the same time.

>> They find the information that a customer wants and speak at the same time.

The advantage of this is that we can solve work and save time.

>> CORRECT!

So these jobs is essential the multitasking.

>> So multitasking is essential in these jobs.

But, except for the above jobs.
I think many jobs owner seem to avoid multitasking.

>> But, except for the jobs mentioned above, I think many job owners seem to avoid multitasking.

One of the reasons is that the quality of work is poor.

>> CORRECT!

So, I think the pros and cons of multitasking this seem to vary depending on the jobs.

>> So, I think the pros and cons of multitasking seem to vary depending on the jobs.

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