homework 10.27

2023-10-27 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What do you think is the worst sleeping disorder? I think the worst sleeping disorder is \"narcolepsy\". Narcolepsy is when you fall asleep without realizing in daily life. Severe people this disease can\'t have a stay daily life. In addition, they are easily exposed to the risk of accidents because suddenly collapsing their body. And next, I think the worst sleep disorder is \"sleeping walking\". Sleeping walking is moves the body without conscious while sleeping. It\'s also can lead to a big accident because moving your body without your knowledge. I think it\'s one of the lucky things to be able to safely sleep.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the worst sleeping disorder?

I think the worst sleeping disorder is \"narcolepsy\".

>> CORRECT!

Narcolepsy is when you fall asleep without realizing in daily life.

>> Narcolepsy is when you fall asleep without realizing it.

Severe people this disease can\'t have a stay daily life.

>> Several people have this disease, and they can\'t have a stable life.

In addition, they are easily exposed to the risk of accidents because suddenly collapsing their body.

>> In addition, they are easily exposed to the risk of accidents because of sudden collapsing of their body.

And next, I think the worst sleep disorder is \"sleeping walking\".

>> CORRECT!

Sleeping walking is moves the body without conscious while sleeping.

>> Sleeping walking is the way your body moves, unconsciously walking while sleeping.

It\'s also can lead to a big accident because moving your body without your knowledge.

>> It also can lead to a big accident because of moving your body without your knowledge.

I think it\'s one of the lucky things to be able to safely sleep.

>> I think it\'s one of the lucky things to be able to sleep safely.

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