Homework 10/29
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Korea is one of most of small countries, moreover half of territory is divided by ideology.
In other words, this means Korea doesn't have a magnificent God-made attraction compared with other countries like Switzerland.
On the other hands, Korea has indigenous and unique nature.
Gang-hwa island is the place where dolmens are most located in and Go-sun region is the place where dinosaur's traces are most found.
Both of regions are appointed as "the world cultural heritage" by UNESCO.
Jeju island is the most popular resort where Chinese as well as Korean visit.
Unlike Korean peninsular, Jeju island is located in a tropical climate, which
made itself the most attractive resort in Korea.
I could see the emerald-colored ocean like Boracay, twisted seashore and a lot of traces of volcano activities.
Over 70% of Korea land is mountain, especially Busan is one of most mountainous cities.
People who visit Busan might be surprised with the city-view that shows efforts that immigrants have made.
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Korea is one of most of small countries, moreover half of territory is divided by ideology.
>> Korea is one of the smallest country around the globe but half of its territory is divided by ideology.
In other words, this means Korea doesn\'t have a magnificent God-made attraction compared with other countries like Switzerland.
>> This means that Korea doesn\'t have a magnificent God-made attraction compared with other countries like Switzerland.
On the other hands, Korea has indigenous and unique nature.
>> On the other hand, Korea has an indigenous, unique and natural beauties.
Gang-hwa island is the place where dolmens are most located in and Go-sun region is the place where dinosaur\'s traces are most found.
>> Gang-hwa island is the place where dolmens are mostly located and Go-sun region is the place where dinosaurs\' traces are mostly found.
Both of regions are appointed as \"the world cultural heritage\" by UNESCO.
>> Both regions are appointed as \"the world cultural heritage\" by UNESCO. (WOW!!)
Jeju island is the most popular resort where Chinese as well as Korean visit.
>>Jeju island is the most popular resort where Chinese and Koreans loves to visit.
Unlike Korean peninsular, Jeju island is located in a tropical climate, which
made itself the most attractive resort in Korea.
>> One of Korean\'s peninsular is Jeju island which is located in a tropical climate place and is the most attractive resort in Korea.
I could see the emerald-colored ocean like Boracay, twisted seashore and a lot of traces of volcano activities.
>> I could see the emerald-colored ocean like Boracay, twisted seashells and a lot of traces of volcano activities.
Over 70% of Korea land is mountain, especially Busan is one of most mountainous cities.
>> Over 70% of Korea land is composed of mountains especially Busan which is one of the mountainous cities here in Korea.
People who visit Busan might be surprised with the city-view that shows efforts that immigrants have made.
>> People who visits Busan might be surprised with the view of the city which shows efforts made by the immigrants.
>> Korea is one of the smallest country around the globe but half of its territory is divided by ideology.
In other words, this means Korea doesn\'t have a magnificent God-made attraction compared with other countries like Switzerland.
>> This means that Korea doesn\'t have a magnificent God-made attraction compared with other countries like Switzerland.
On the other hands, Korea has indigenous and unique nature.
>> On the other hand, Korea has an indigenous, unique and natural beauties.
Gang-hwa island is the place where dolmens are most located in and Go-sun region is the place where dinosaur\'s traces are most found.
>> Gang-hwa island is the place where dolmens are mostly located and Go-sun region is the place where dinosaurs\' traces are mostly found.
Both of regions are appointed as \"the world cultural heritage\" by UNESCO.
>> Both regions are appointed as \"the world cultural heritage\" by UNESCO. (WOW!!)
Jeju island is the most popular resort where Chinese as well as Korean visit.
>>Jeju island is the most popular resort where Chinese and Koreans loves to visit.
Unlike Korean peninsular, Jeju island is located in a tropical climate, which
made itself the most attractive resort in Korea.
>> One of Korean\'s peninsular is Jeju island which is located in a tropical climate place and is the most attractive resort in Korea.
I could see the emerald-colored ocean like Boracay, twisted seashore and a lot of traces of volcano activities.
>> I could see the emerald-colored ocean like Boracay, twisted seashells and a lot of traces of volcano activities.
Over 70% of Korea land is mountain, especially Busan is one of most mountainous cities.
>> Over 70% of Korea land is composed of mountains especially Busan which is one of the mountainous cities here in Korea.
People who visit Busan might be surprised with the city-view that shows efforts that immigrants have made.
>> People who visits Busan might be surprised with the view of the city which shows efforts made by the immigrants.
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