Homework 10.6
학생이 쓴 원문
Would you like to be famous? Why or why not? What would you like to be famous for?
: I would like to be famous person who gives good influences to our society. I want to tell to people about social problems. Such as, environmental pollution or animals in danger. If I become famous, telling them these problems, I think I can c[이름]ge world to good way.
강사 첨삭
1. I would like to be famous person who gives good influences to our society.
>>I want to be a famous person who contributes good influences on our society.
2. I want to tell to people about social problems. Such as, environmental pollution or animals in danger.
>>I want to tell people about social problems such as environmental pollution or animals in danger.
4. If I become famous, telling them these problems, I think I can c[이름]ge world to good way.
>>If I become famous, telling them these problems, I think I can c[이름]ge the world in a better way.
Very good point, Michelle!
- T. Melody ^^
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