homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
We are often told that \"you can\'t buy happiness\".
If you were richer, do you think you would be happier? Why/why not?
I think I would be happier if I were richer. In this age, we definitely need some money to do something we want to. If I were richer, I wouldn\'t worry about money when I want to do something or buy something and it would be the evidence that I would be happier because I could reduce one of my concerns. However, if I try to get richer more and more, then it would make me unhappier because I would always feel that it\'s not enough. Thus, we need to be satisfied with our present status and just enjoy it for the happy life. :)
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Hello [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
I also agree haha~
Have a good night!
I think I would be happier if I were richer.
>>CORRECT
In this age, we definitely need some money to do something we want to.
>>At this age, we definitely need money to do things we want.
If I were richer, I wouldn\'t worry about money when I want to do something or buy something and it would be the evidence that I would be happier because I could reduce one of my concerns.
>>If I were richer, I wouldn\'t worry about money when I want to do things or buy things and it would be the evidence that I would be happier because I could lessen my concerns.
However, if I try to get richer more and more, then it would make me unhappier because I would always feel that it\'s not enough.
>>However, if I try to become richer, then it would make me unhappy because I would always feel that it\'s not enough.
Thus, we need to be satisfied with our present status and just enjoy it for the happy life. :)
>>CORRECT
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