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If corruption is a problem in a country, how could it be reduced?
I think corruption is very hard to reduce it. First, most corruption happens among senior government officials, and general citizens cannot recognize that they are doing corruption. Second, if they were caught by the corruption they have the ability to make it small and cover up with the other issues. If we want to make our country incorruptible then citizens should concern about our politics and keep it continuously. Also, the government should make auditing organizations to every public activity.
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>> I think corruption is very hard to reduce.
First, most corruption happens among senior government officials, and general citizens cannot recognize that they are doing corruption.
>>First, most corruption happens among senior government officials, and the common people are not aware that they are being corrupt.
Second, if they were caught by the corruption they have the ability to make it small and cover up with the other issues.
>> Second, whenever they are caught, they have the power to reduce and cover it up with other issues.
If we want to make our country incorruptible then citizens should concern about our politics and keep it continuously.
>> If we want to make our country incorruptible, the citizens should be concerned about our politics every time.
Also, the government should make auditing organizations to every public activity.
>> Also, the government should make the organizations\' audits public.
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