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2020-07-20 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Why do people become criminals? What are the causes of crime? Are some people born bad or do they become criminals as a consequence of the environment? Answer in 5 sentences or more. I think that people are effected from environment surrounding them like their neighborhood, parents, and friends. So, environment can make people to criminals. For example, If a person has friends who committed crimes, there is more possibility to be a criminals than people who don\'t have any friend who committed crimes. So, I firmly believe that environment is so important to build one\'s personality.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

This gives us a couple of things to discuss.

There are also some that we need to review.

Thank you for being so diligent.

I trust in your capabilities.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

I think that people are effected from environment surrounding them like their neighborhood, parents, and friends.

>> I think that people are affected by the environment surrounding them like their neighborhood, parents, and friends.
So, environment can make people to criminals.

>> So, the environment can turn people into criminals.
For example, If a person has friends who committed crimes, there is more possibility to be a criminals than people who don\'t have any friend who committed crimes.

>> For example, if a person has friends who committed crimes, there is a bigger possibility in being a criminal than people who don\'t have any friends who committed crimes.
So, I firmly believe that environment is so important to build one\'s personality.

>> So, I firmly believe that environment is very important to build one\'s personality.

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