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2020-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Do you feel that you have sufficient time to do everything you need every day? If not, how could you get more time? I think that the things that you have to do for a day depend on how you made a plan for the day and that\'s why we can normally control the work burden of each day. However, sometimes the work burden or the deadlines come together. In this case, I classify each job with its importance and make a sequence of them. Next, I deal with the most important and urgent job first, and then, I try to finish the shortest time required jobs. Finally, if I cannot make enough time to handle all the jobs then I would start talking about delay it with stakeholders.

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I think that the things that you have to do for a day depend on how you made a plan for the day and that\'s why we can normally control the work burden of each day. 
>> I think that the amount of work you do for a day depends on how you plan it,  that\'s why we can control the workload for each day.
OR
>>I think that the things you have to do for a day depends on your plan,that\'s why you can control your burden each day.

However, sometimes the work burden or the deadlines come together. 
>> However, sometimes the workload and the deadlines come together.
OR >> However, sometimes the burdens in work and deadlines come together.

In this case, I classify each job with its importance and make a sequence of them. 
>> In this case, I classify each job according to its importance and make a sequence.

Next, I deal with the most important and urgent job first, and then, I try to finish the shortest time required jobs.
>> Next, I deal with the most important and urgent jobs first, then I try to finish the jobs that require the shortest times.

 Finally, if I cannot make enough time to handle all the jobs then I would start talking about delay it with stakeholders.
>> Finally, if the time is not enough to handle all the jobs, then, I would tell the stakeholders about the delay.


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