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What is the purpose of art?
I think that the purpose of art is for giving pleasure to people. We would be satisfied when we listen to music, watch a fine film, look at an art exhibition, so on. In my case, I enjoy listening to music when I want to feel comfortable and relax. it gives me a small pleasure and it helps me refresh. I think that other people feel art with the same purpose as me.
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Hello again [이름]~
Thank you for sharing your ideas!
I also agree with that.
Have a nice night!
I think that the purpose of art is for giving pleasure to people.
>>CORRECT
We would be satisfied when we listen to music, watch a fine film, look at an art exhibition, so on.
>>CORRECT
In my case, I enjoy listening to music when I want to feel comfortable and relax.
>>CORRECT
it gives me a small pleasure and it helps me refresh.
>>It gives me a little bit of pleasure and it helps me relax.
I think that other people feel art with the same purpose as me.
>>CORRECT
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