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2020-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Would you like to spend more time with your computer or would you like to spend more time with friends I definitely would like to spend more time with my friends. However, it\'s just my hope and I spend more time with my computer. For example, I spend most of my working time to use my computer. I keep my laptop on from the beginning to the end while I\'m staying in the office because I have to use it while I\'m working. After I get home I don\'t want to turn my computer on. However, sometimes I have to turn on my computer even when I am at home. For instance, if something urgent matters happen then I have to connect to my systems with my laptop. Plus, when I study I have to use it for searching for some information. Additionally, when I watch an online education video I need to use my computer.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]~
Thank you for answering the homework.
I think you really are hard workin!
I hope it pays off in the end.
Great sentence construction!

I definitely would like to spend more time with my friends.
>>I would definitely  like to spend more time with my friends.

 However, it\'s just my hope and I spend more time with my computer.
>>CORRECT

 For example, I spend most of my working time to use my computer.
>>CORRECT

 I keep my laptop on from the beginning to the end while I\'m staying in the office because I have to use it while I\'m working. 
>>CORRECT

After I get home I don\'t want to turn my computer on.
>>CORRECT

 However, sometimes I have to turn on my computer even when I am at home. 
>>CORRECT

For instance, if something urgent matters happen then I have to connect to my systems with my laptop. 
>>For instance, if some urgent matter happen, then I have to connect to my systems with my laptop.

Plus, when I study I have to use it for searching for some information. 
>>CORRECT

Additionally, when I watch an online education video I need to use my computer.
>>CORRECT

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